Occupy Wall Street and What?

      Devin Rosario’s blog about the Occupy Wall Street as a “soft mannered revolution” leaves readers   slightly confused. Read his blog here: http://governmentmirror.blogspot.com/2011/11/occupy-once-more.html The article Devin blogs about is found here: http://globalspin.blogs.time.com/2011/11/17/the-whole-world-watches-again-occupy-wall-street-strikes-back/

     He mentions speaking with Brighton Wallace of Austin, TX, but does not specify what Wallace said that was so passionate and driven or why Devin was fortunate to speak with him. Devin could have engaged his readers with dialogue from his and Wallace’s intimate conversation. In question also, is what Brighton Wallace’s job loss was a result of; what protestors are speaking out against? After writing of his conversation with Wallace he claims, “Since that day I have been approached by young men with bandana’s covering their faces, passing out packets often filled with grammatical errors and loosely worded paragraphs”. Readers are confused at his statement because it lacks background information why of young men are wearing bandanas over their faces or what the packets were about. Rosario leaves his readers with questions such as: the grammatical errors and loosely worded paragraphs are of what significance to the movement or us? What did the packets have inside them? Rosario needed to explain in detail how the packets the young men were passing out related to his amazement with the Occupy Wall Street movement.


     Rosario states, “It amazes me that in my time I would see a movement such as Occupy” and does not further explain why it is amazing. It would be to his advantage if he told his readers why Occupy Wall Street is important and not just compare the Vietnam protests to it. He goes on to say, “One of the biggest differences I noticed in this article was the anticipation leading up to November 17^th…”. Beside his sentence being too long he states their was a difference he noticed. Readers do not know what the difference is because they are not told what other event he is thinking of. I assume he meant an article on a Vietnam protest.

     Rosario ends his blog telling readers that the movement gains interest and publicity every day. He says the article he is blogging about inspires him to look further into the cause and success of the Wall Street Protest, yet he does not offer any links or websites with sources of reporting about the movement. Rosario left his readers with a link to the article he read, a brief recollection of speaking with a leader in the Austin movement and not much else.